Post by Old Man Rupee on Jan 24, 2008 4:38:10 GMT -5
OK, its been a week, I want this thing to move on quickly so I'll PM Savageadam again with a deadline of two more days. He didn't reply to my first PM, so if he doesn't reply to this one, we're moving on without him.
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Post by Savage Adam on Jan 24, 2008 12:23:42 GMT -5
As Mario and the Toads were gazing at the horrible sight, something was happening in the former castle of Princess Peach...
"WHAT DID YOU JUST SAY??!!" Said an strange voice. "Someone has broken into the treasure room!" Said another voice. "Did they take anything?!?!" Said the first voice. "Um, he havn't checked yet, your highness." "Well then CHECK! You ugly little pig....." "Please refrain from yelling at my troops, Bowser." Said a third person who had just entered the room.
"Grr. Porkey! Stay out of this!" Said Bowser. "Bowser, you do realize that my army is much more powerful than your pitiful group of Goombas and Koopas." Said Porkey. "What does that have to do with anything?" "And you realize that at any time I could take the three treasures for myself, thus taking away your imortality." "All right! I get it!" Said Bowser. "Good." Said Porkey.
At that moment, a Koopa ran in. "YOUR HIGHNESS!!! THE STAR ROD IS GONE!!!"
In a dark tunnel, under the castle...
"Man. Way to go MK. Thanks for only stealing the treasure important to you." Said a very sarcastic sounding voice. "I would have taken the others, but all those Pigmasks came in. I can't fight that many. And besides, I can't pick up the Master Emerald!" Said another, slightly older sounding voice. "Doesn't explane why you didn't get the Master Sword, old man." Said a third voice. "Watch your tongue kid! Just because your dad was some great hero doesnt mean you can talk like that to me!" Said the "old man". "Yo, chill dudes." Said the sarcastic voice. "Look, we at least got one treasure, so Bowser and Porkey should loose there imortality." "Lets just get back to Samus and get out of here, ok guys?" Said the third voice. "Fine." Said the sarcastic voice and the "old man", who is actually Meta-Knight.
"Samus? Are you there?" Said Meta-Knight into a walkie-talkie. "Sure old man." Said Samus. "*sigh* Please don't call me that." "Fine." "Pick us up in the field two hours north of the castle." "Roger that. Out." Said Samus.
Sorry it took me so long to post this. Also, incase it wasn't clear, the Old man is Meta-Knight, the sarcastic voice is Sonic's son, and the other voice is the son of LInk and Ilia. I'll let future posters come up with names for them.
And as I said last time, I'm not very experienced in this sort of thing, so sorry if it sucks.
EDIT: I modified a couple parts, mostly the Samus Meta-Knight conversation.
Mario and the three Toad’s were sneaking out of the remains of Toad Town as fast as possible, hiding in the shadows of rubble that were once great buildings and wandering through formally bright and clean streets that now were covered in a layer of muck, junk and more rubble. Propaganda posters promoting Bowser and Porky were plastered on the few standing walls.
“Hurry!! Behind-a Here!!” Mario ordered the Toad’s as a small truck sized pig shaped wooden airship flew overhead towards the castle.
“Where are we going anyway?” A Toad yelled. “I don’t really know-a but I think we should be getting a far away from the castle it looks like Bowser controls the castle” said Mario. “Hey guys looks what I found!” The second Toad. “It’s a newspaper . . .” The third Toad said confused. “But look at the headline, B&P EMPIRE TAKE OVERS CASTLE!! Power hungry evil doers take over castle and surrounding land with surprising power and force.” “And the date is twenty years from now so it means . . .” “We’re in a dark future controlled by Bowser” said Mario. “Yeah but what does the “P” stand for?” Said the third Toad. “I think know what it stands for.” Exclaimed the first Toad. “Look at that poster on the wall, I remember seeing more of them when we were running through the streets”
They all gazed at the wall to finally notice the propaganda poster of the two that had taken over the land, “Obey the Bowser and Porky Empire! Muma-mia!!” Mario yelled. “Hey wait a minute . . .”
One minute later.
“Who the heck-a is Porky? He looks like some little fat-a kid . . . Or a humanoid pig . . . Or just a pig standing on it’s hind legs wearing-a clothes and a wig. Well now I understand the flying pigs/wooden Bowser airships now. It must be some sharing/collaboration of technology, to turn two different-a groups into one big empire.” The Toads nodded in agreement and said in unison “Yeah that must be it . . . That will do Mario . . . That will do.”
Then suddenly grimy loudspeakers erupted from the direction of the castle, making the four jump (especially Mario who jumped a few meters into the air).
“Attention all henchmen of the Bowser and Porky Empire, Freedom Fighter scum have finally appeared and have stolen an important item from us, CAPUTRE THE REBELIOUS SCUM AND RECLAME IT NOW . . . . . . FOR THE GOOD OF THE B&P EMPIRE!! (Sounds of whoever is using microphone getting shoved off) “Cough, cough, cough!! (Gruff sounding voice) “Good luck to the minion or minions in our army who captures those treacherous dogs first by the way!!” (Sound of first voice in background) “Did you REALLY have to say tha . . .” (gruff sounding voice) “The microphone’s still on” BzzzzzTTT!!! (Microphone turns off).
The four turned to look at the castle, when they saw large hatches opening on top of the castle. “Those must be hangers for those pig airships” cried the second Toad. “Ruuuunnnn!!” Mario yelled as they turned a corner and approached the end of the town. Looking out he could see the grassy plains followed by the top of trees from the nearby forest and mountains far behind them, when suddenly a manhole in front of them flew out of the ground making them stop dead in their tracks.
A green hedgehog with extremely shaggy spines and a red vest leapt out of the hole gasping, “Whoa . . . It can’t be . . . It was true . . . Colin!! Get up here now, its way past cool!!” He was followed up by a humanoid figure with pointed ears, “Manic, what is . . . it? The humanoid figure locked his eyes on Mario. “(Gasp!!!) I can’t believe it’s really him, all this waiting was worth it! Old man get up here now!” Meta-Knight flew out of the hole, “It better not be more of B&P Empire’s henchmen, I really am getting to old to fight (gasp!! As he locked his eyes on Mario) . . . Ma . . . Mar . . . Mario!!” “Yes that is-a my name! Mario replied. Are you the Freedom Fighters that the loudspeaker mentioned?” “There’s no time to explain shouted Manic, We need to get out of here now! Come with us if you want to live!” “Well, actually there is time to explain, yes we are Freedom Fighters and I am Colin, son of Link, this green hedgehog beside me is Manic, son of Sonic and this is the Legendary Meta Knight” “But we prefer to call him old man” snapped Manic. (Everyone laughs except for Meta Knight) “The worst part about that is I’m not that ol . . . Pig Airships approaching from the castle we need to get back now!!!” said Meta Knight. “I think it’s time for me to finally use this!” Colin said as he pulled out a crossbow and began firing long and wide, high and low into the air. They were not regular crossbow bolts he fired, thick black smoke poured from them covering the area in a curtain of darkness. “Ahhhh . . . the cover of darkness . . . stealth, my favorite form of travel” Said MK looking up at the sky. “Now everyone grab an arm around my shoulders and hold on! It’s time for some super speed!!” Manic shouted as they all grabbed on to him in chain like fashion. Mario was on second to last spot when one of the Toad’s grabbed onto him. Arrrggghhhh!! Sunburn!!!! Let me go in the last spot!! They switched places and Manic doubled back into Toad Town (for stealth purposes) and then raced out of town towards the rendezvous point.
2 hours later
Manic slowed down, breathing heavily he exclaimed, “I don’t think I have ran that fast carrying that many people on me, I can’t run anymore we’ll have to walk the rest of the way. Mario and Colin both picked up Manic and the group continued on running (at normal running speed, not Manic speed) North.
20 minutes later.
The group approached the field, which was surrounding by a giant forest with mountains nearby. A body of water was to the right of the field, too small to be a lake, too non-salty to be considered as a pathetically sized inland sea, but it was a body of water.
MK pulled out his walkie-talkie, “Samus, we’re here, where’s our ride? . . . Over.” “Don’t worry Mike Jones is there” was the reply.
Bubbles began appearing on the water followed by a large yellow blur which burst out of the water, revealing itself to be a gleaming yellow submarine, with the words, SUB-C on the side of it. A hatch on top opened and a guy with brown hair and freckles poked his head out. He yelled out “What took you guys so long . . . (Gasp!) is that Mario? Now I thought this mission we had all been waiting for was going to suck but finding the great hero Mario . . . This totally makes up for it!! Now hurry up and get in, everyone is going to go nuts over you when we get back.” “Back where?” One of the Toad’s asked. “You see that natural cliff over there to the south”, said Hector pointing, “It’s a bit hard to see because of all the trees, but we have a base of operations underneath the rock there, it’s named the Underground City but us Freedom Fighters just call it home.”
Later inside Sub-C.
“Nav-Com, take us back home, the Underground City” Mike said to the computer console at the front of the sub. “Affirm-aaa-tiiive!” replied Nav-Com. Sub-C sank into the depths, it rear props started to spin and the sub came up to speed, while progressing through the underwater caverns back to the Underground City. “How rude of me I should have introduced myself” I’m Mike Jones he said as he shook Mario and each of the Toad’s hands. “Also Mario you might want to use this, as he reached over to a cabinet and pulled out of bottle with the words, SKIN DAMAGE LOTION. Mario grabbed the bottle and frantically started rubbing lotion on to his exposed skin. “Mama-mia, I can feel the relief already!”
A few minutes later
“We arrree approchhinng home” said Nav-Com “Starting surfacing procedure. All forward props stopping, verticaaal motion in process . . . . . . . Breakinnng surface in 3, 2, 1 . . . (SPLASH!!) Surfaaace reaaached, Welcommme homeee.” “Thanks Nav-Com” replied Mike as he climbed up the ladder and opened the hatch and assisted every one out on to an adjacent dock. “Welcome to the Underground City!! “Now follow me to the War Room, people are going to be so excited to see you!!” The Underground City was made of up structures and buildings but the one that stuck out the most was the War Room that oversaw a huge courtyard where crowds could gather.
Mario and the Toad’s followed behind Manic, Colin, MK (who was flying through the air holding the Star Rod for onlookers to see) and leading them was Mike. When they ran people cheered at the sight of the Star Rod and then were awed at the presence of Mario, a group practicing sword combat dropped their weapons, an entire unit running through an obstacle course stopped dead to look. Those who saw him run by stopped to look, some even bowed at the sight of him and one even fainted.
Mike Slammed the War Room door open, exhaustedly yelling out “THEY FOUND HIM!!!! HE’S FINALLY HERE!!!!!” The war room was a circular room filled with computers and personal, and had a giant tactical map of castle and the surrounding land. There was a giant window to the left of the door overlooked the courtyard, Mario could even see the SUB-C sitting at the dock through it. It also appeared that everyone was beginning to gather in the courtyard patiently waiting for what was going to happen next. Everyone in the room stopped what they were doing to turn around and look, a cheer came from those in the room when MK landing in the room holding the Star Rod and then was quickly silenced when Mario walked in. “Wow . . . Why is everyone so excited to see-a me?” Asked Mario. “Because you will have us save the world . . .” Replied the voice “Mama-mia, who said that!” “I did . . . Will someone here activate the window shutters and then turn on the lights? It might be nice to have a little privacy from the onlookers outside” The room went dark as shutter covered it up and then became normal again when the lights turned on. as Samus walking into view, the Varia suit she wore had battle marks on it, there was no Arm Cannon and no armor on the other arm as well, this missing amour revealed blue zero suit underneath, she didn’t wear her helmet either and her pistol was kept neat her waist. “I am Samus Aran.” “Are you the leader of the Freedom Fighters?” asked one of the Toad’s The Toad next to him said, “Of course she is . . . Doesn’t she look like a leader to you!” “Good question” Samus replied “I am the main military leader but not the full leader, the main tactician, the commander, the one who got us here in the first place, the one who helped and formed some of our best plans is . . .” “Me” a soft elegant voice spoke who just walked in from a door on the opposite side of the room. “Princess Peach!!” the three Toad exclaimed all at once. “I am not Princess anymore, out here that title is non-existent” she spoke as she stepped into the light it could be seen that she was not wearing her usual pink dress but instead she wore a tight black professional looking outfit way more military and not royal looking, on her head she wore no crown and her blond hair had been tied in to a pony tail and a communication headset was on her right ear. The only feature she had left was her blue spherical earrings. Mario, I have waited a decade for this day.” (Gasp!) Huh? (Peach taps a button on her headset). “Perrie and Professor Hector come in here and Prof, bring in the crystal” A Koopa huddled in on a crutch and was followed behind by a trolley covered with a white sheet that was pushed in by Prof. Hector, “Here . . . He . . . Is”, implying to the crystal said Prof Hector. “Mario what you see may shock you, prepare yourself.” Peach pulled off the sheet and it was a giant purple crystal but inside it was someone very familiar. “LUIGI!!!!!” Mario and the Toad’s screamed. Luigi’s body was in crystal standing up, his eyes closed and his right arm was extended to nearly reach the outside. On the side the Crystal was the Mario logo “M” and the very date of this day. “Wait! What-a the heck is going on here, where did thing come from, how did my brother get in there?” “Mario, I will explain everything I just need you to touch the crystal and free Luigi, and you will begin the first step of fighting back against the Bowser and Porky Empire” Said Peach. “Mario,” Professor Hector spoke “Nothing can drill or cut through this, only you can, touch the part of the crystal closest to Luigi’s outstretch hand.” Mario approached the crystal and placed his hand near Luigi’s, for a few seconds nothing happened and then the crystal started glowing. “It’s working!! It’s working!!” Everyone except for Mario in the room yelled out excitedly. The glow went super bright making everyone turn there heads away, until it finally stopped. When they turned around there was no crystal and Luigi was just lying on the trolley. He opened his eyes and sat up and looked around at everybody and said “Where-a the heck am I . . . I was fighting that giant monster, I got plunged into an airship and now I here? Where am I again?”
“This is 20 years in the future, is the Underground City, the home of us, the Freedom Fighters, and these are (explains everyone in the room Mario and the Toad’s had previously met). We are all Freedom Fighters, the only resistance against the scourge known as the Bowser and Porky Empire AKA the B&P Empire.”
“Well you see 20 years ago (FLASHBACK!) witnesses saw the time stream altering creature known as Diagia come and attack Toad Town, Since Mario was on vacation, Luigi fought it instead and Diagia trapped Luigi inside a giant crystal, which was finally uncovered in the snowy peaks 10 years later. Mean while when Mario got back he and these 3 Toads were transported to the future by it. After that incident Bowser and Porky hatched a plan, a very devious plan, a plan to make them immortal by taking 3 sacred treasures, with their combined strength, resources and technology they defeated Sonic for The Master Emerald, fought Link for The Master sword and battled Kirby for the Mast . . . Err, I mean Star Rod which Meta Knight holding now. The also have another function a function greater than immortality.”
“With the treasures gather they stormed my castle. With you and Luigi both missing to defend it, myself and many others fled for safety, the rest were captured and enslaved to work for the newly formed B&P Empire. Myself and our remaining forces set up a refuge in the old growth forest that takes up most of this surrounding land. We named our little community Knothole Village, and that same day we became known as the Freedom Fighters. We stayed there for years doing various missions to disable and disrupt the B&P Empire.”
“But one decade passed and then one day came that would change our situation forever.”
“When I set up Knothole Village I decided to not set let civilians stay there as this was for only those that wanted to risk there lives as fighting against the B&P Empire as Freedom Fighters. A pair called the Ice Climbers took all the civilians to a refuge in the snowy mountains peaks. Life in the snowy mountains is not the best place but it’s safe because Bowser won’t get his Koopa hide there to check it out and also dragged down Porky going there as well because of the sheer cold. Then one day a civilian in the snowy mountain’s found the crystal that Luigi was trapped in. But this crystal did not just have Luigi in it. Inscribed on it was the day Mario would return which of course has already been proven today.”
“When we had received this crystal from civilians in the mountains, a recon team led by MK was out on a mission. They were approaching the outskirts of the ruins of Toad Town, when they encounter something unexpected. A Koopa defector of the B&P Empire, a Koopa who had been at Bowser’s side for years but grew tired of the ways of the B&P Empire and Porky severe negative treatment towards him, this Koopa had also overheard Porky’s true plans and tried to assassinate with a bomb him but had only severely damaged the use of his legs.”
A battle damaged Koopa hobbled out on a pair of crutches over into the middle of the room. “I am Perrie Reginald Koopa, Bowser’s former public relations Koopa.” “Wow! What a coincidence that your initials just happened to be the same for your job title” exclaimed one of the Toad’s. “Well that’s how I got the job in the first place, PR Koopa said laughing at the same time.”
(FLASHBACK!!) “After the explosion, I managed to get out of the castle even with my severe injuries, using some pieces of scrap metal as crutches. By an amazing stroke of fate I caught up with the Freedom Fighters recon. I told them how the B&P Empire knew where they lived and that they were going to attack soon. I wanted to defect from the Empire, I wanted to become a Freedom Fighter, I also had valuable info about how the B&P Empire worked and what Porky’s true intention is, to kill Bowser and form the Porky Empire, an even more savage and ruthless the B&P Empire. They didn’t believe me but Meta Knight did . . . He knew that I wasn’t a trap of some sort seeing the horrible condition I was in. He cancelled the mission and took me back to Knothole. That’s was the first and last time I was in Knothole Village as soon as I told them what was going to happen they began filling up the place with explosives and fleeing to here, the Underground City.”
“Why-a doesn’t Porky just finish-a off Bowser now?” Asked Mario. “When you live forever, you can really, really, really take your time in doing things” said Koopa.
Peach began speaking again (FLASHBACK!!) “The B&P Empire had finally found our location in the forest and was going to send out an army to capture us thanks to the info from Perrie, a few years before we had discovered this giant cave system in this nearby mountain, on that day we moved nearly all our resources and all our personnel here and then we planted the explosives in Knothole. We sealed up all the exits to the outside by blowing them up so they appeared natural and looked like it was not possible to get inside here. With a hidden camera we waited until his army came and swarmed around the village, I activated the bombs, blowing up Knothole, his army and making it look like all the Freedom Fighters had committed suicide as well but after today the B&P Empire appears to still have enough of an army that wasn’t present there to survive and now they are certain to know we did not commit suicide as well.”
“And then the waiting began for Mario, 10 long years of waiting and training for the final battle against the B&P Empire . . . But there is another thing that you should know.”
Peach walked over and pressed a few buttons on a nearby keypad. Up from a space behind the keypad came a pedestal. There was a strange double barred object on top of it.
“This here Mario and Luigi is the 4th treasure the “The Sacred Bongos”, the B&P Empire does not know about this. It will only activate if the power sources for it, the 3 sacred treasures, are inserted into it. Then when the two heroes AKA Mario and Luigi play it they will be able to . . . Errrr . . . Well . . . Fix time . . . Or get any wish . . . You know it’s a power greater than immortality . . . Or something like that . . . Maybe,” said Peach “Maybe!!?” Yelled Luigi. “Hey! We don’t know everything,” said Samus, “all the ancient lore and research is confusing and it’s missing chunks of info. All we need to do is get our hands on the other two treasures, power up the bongos and see what happens and hopefully fix this dark future. There has to be some connection between Diagia and Porky. We’ll still confused if whether or no Diagia was the reason Luigi was put into a crystal.” “Time travel, it confusing as heck and makes your head hurt” said Professor Hector. “But what we know is that we need you two, Mario and Luigi” Peach said “To lead us Freedom Fighters into battle to fight the B&P Empire and reclaim the other two sacred treasures.”
My apologies for making it so long but I had so many good ideas for the setting of the future. Also SA I hope you like the names I gave to Sonic's son and Link's son.
Also there are quite a few references in there, which I think will be a little obscure but don't worry if you miss them none of them do anything with the story. And if you want to know what they are because you can't find them or in the more likely case too obscure, I'll post them.
Last Edit: Mar 24, 2008 19:22:10 GMT -5 by Da Robot
Well it's been more than a month, I sent a PM to Flip to remind him that it was his turn write the next part of the story.
EDIT: I PM Flip and he told me he can't do it, so I PM Old Man Rupee to pick someone else.
Also I'll reveal some of the references for ideas in the last chunk of the story I wrote.
Manik is named after Sonic's brother Manik in the Sonic cartoon "Sonic Underground."
Colin is named after Colin from TLoZ: TP
Many elements from the world are taken from the Sonic cartoon "Sonic the Hedgehog" (manly known by the fan name Sonic SatAM to differnate itself from the orignal game) such as the dark, destroyed setting of Toad Town, rebels being named "Freedom Fighters." "Knothole Village" was the home of the FF in Sonic SatAM and was loacated in a huge forest just like in this story. Princess Peach saying saying her "princess title is non extentant out here" was originally said by Princess Sally in Sonic SatAM. The Underground City is imspired from an episode of Sonic SatAM where they discovered other FF in a hidden city underground that no one knew about. But that city was underground a Dr Robonik controlled city while the one in my story is inside a giant cave inside a cliff/rock face.
Mike Jones and the Sub-C submarine are from the NES game StarTropics. I never played ST when I wrote this and I only downloaded from VC just this month so that explans the odd things about it.
PR Koopa's name being Perrie Reginald are references to former Nintendo employee Perrie Kaplan. I also like to note PK is a woman while PR Koopa is still a guy. Reginald is the long version of the name Reggie and that is refering to Reggie Fils Amie president of Nintendo of America.
Dr Hector is the scientist who created R.O.B. in the game Gyromite. Hector was the original name of Colin and came from the character Hector in the GBA game Fire Emblem but it was just the same name and nothing more. Than I noticed the same name clash and changed his name to Colin.
The Sacred Bongo's are of course DK Bongos.
The giant map and computer monitors in the War Room is partally inspired from the War Room from Season 3 of the animated series ReBoot.
The only difference in my idea was that the room did not have the overlooking second story, more doors leading out and had windows (with closeable shutters) looking to an outside courtyard.
Another Season 3 ReBoot inspiration is Princess Peach's military outfit. The outfit is worn by this character in the image.
Yeah, that should be all of the references from my part of the story.
Last Edit: Mar 24, 2008 3:57:38 GMT -5 by Da Robot
I have to admit this my part of the story was very hard to write, with all the missing parts and introduction of new characters and setting. What I wrote helps tie all the missing parts together and intorduced (small) new ones to help it make sense. Unfortunatly all of that went and took up a lot of text.
Now I'll like to ask, Nester and TV Eye what parts of the story are you confused on? And has anyone fully read (not skipped through or read only parts of it) the last part of the story I wrote?
Last Edit: Mar 24, 2008 19:34:27 GMT -5 by Da Robot
Post by Nester the Lark on Mar 24, 2008 23:28:45 GMT -5
Well, Da Robot, here's the thing. I've read thru almost every part up until now. I have to confess that I did not read thru all of your last part. But all in all, the story has gotten a little too convoluted for my tastes.
Back when we started, it was supposed to be a Mario-themed fan fic, and I could handle that. But since then, there have been so many extra characters added from many different franchises, some of which I'm not that familiar with, so I'm not comfortable writing for them. So, basically the whole thing has evolved into a beast that I'm less interested in and ill suited to handle.
Perhaps it's just a case of too many cooks in the kitchen.