Thanks! I really wanted to leave it open like that so that Nester had plenty of options for the Middle part of the story. That's why I didn't reveal which Pokémon was attacking Corneria. I'll admit that the end part of my story was kinda lame and theres not much going on but I guess I wanted to build into it. Also I didn't want to go further into it seems as though these are short stories this time.
Edit - Oh...400 posts, Kohta has evolved to Bubbles! ;D
Post by Nester the Lark on Apr 20, 2008 21:33:52 GMT -5
This didn't take as long as I thought it might.
Since Kohta referenced Brawl, I did too (hence, why I chose the Pokemon I did). I also played off the competitive nature between Fox and Falco that Kohta hinted at.
I didn't know what I was doing with the Pokemon, and I really wasn't going anywhere with it, so sorry.
But I'm sure Smashchu will have a ton of ideas and write an absolutely stellar ending for this thing!
Fox made the long flight back to Corneria. He confirmed the team’s location and entered the atmosphere. He found Falco flying lead formation with Krystal and Slippy over a mountain range.
“This is Fox, reporting in,” Fox said over the com unit.
“Look who decided to show up,” Falco blurted out, “Thought you weren’t coming. Thought you were on your precious vacation.”
“Gimmie a break, Falco. Dinosaur Planet’s current orbital position is on the other side of the system. Now, what’s this about a giant Pokemon?”
“You need to see this for yourself. According to the radar, it’s just over that mountain.”
The team passed over the summit, and Fox could hardly believe what he saw sweeping through the valley.
“It’s a Rayquaza! Like from Brawl, except… enormous! How did it get here?”
“I don’t know. We’ve been following it around for hours,” Falco said, “It rips up the land, then takes off flying for hundreds of kilometers, then it starts ripping up the land again.”
“There’s something strange about its behaviour,” Krystal mused, “I sense that it’s…confused…frustrated. Perhaps searching…”
“We need to subdue it before it starts trashing a city or something,” Falco said, “So far, our lasers have had no effect except to tick it off.”
“Look out!” Slippy yelled.
The Rayquaza had dug a large boulder out of the ground and hurled it towards the Arwings. The group narrowly dodged it. The Pokemon swooped across the valley where it began uprooting trees. It finally moved down near a small lake where it burrowed into the ground, leaving a gaping hole. It stayed there for several minutes.
“I think we’d better check this out,” Fox said, “Krystal, you and Slippy stay in the air in case it comes back out. Falco and I are going to land for a closer look.”
“Roger, Fox!” Krystal replied.
They sat their Arwings down near the hole. Fox and Falco hopped out of their cockpits and walked to the edge. Looking into it revealed only darkness.
“Wherever it’s gone, it’s gone in deep,” Fox said.
“Boy, I’m glad you came all the way across Lylat to deliver these astute observations,” Falco said with a sharp edge of sarcasm.
“Quit busting my chops! You don’t always have to be such a loner, you know! Is it really that bad that you might have to share a bounty with a few teammates?”
“What are you talking about, Fox? If I wanted the bounty for myself, I wouldn’t have made Peppy call you guys out here. But I guess you were more concerned about your stupid vacation.”
“Wait a second. You told Peppy to call me?”
“That’s right. I spotted the Rayquaza myself and quickly realized I was in over my head. I may be a loner, but even I’m smart enough to know when I need help.”
Fox paused for a moment, realizing his mistake. “I…I apologize, Falco. I though that… Never mind.”
“Pfft! Thought you knew me better than that,” Falco said, rolling his eyes. He waved his wing towards the hole. “Now what about that thing?”
Fox rubbed the back of his neck. “Well, it’s gotta come up for air sometime. Maybe we can concentrate our fire into its open mouth. That’s probably its weak point.”
“How do you figure that?”
“Isn’t that always the case?”
Another voice entered the conversation behind them. It was deep and sinister, but familiar. “You’ll never subdue it that way,” it said.
Fox and Falco both spun around and simultaneously exclaimed, "Lucario!”
Awesome job Nester! I like the cliff hanger inclusion of Lucario and the little squabbles Fox and Falco have with each other. I always liked that about the games too. Quality piece of writing, wonder which direction Smashchu will go with this?
Post by Old Man Rupee on Apr 22, 2008 3:41:44 GMT -5
Pretty damn good! I like how this story's developed!
I don't think Smashchu's been on for a while, I may need to PM him. Once he finishes the story, I'll start the next draw. Do either of you guys wanna be included again? Or does anyone new wanna be added into the hat?
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"OK Brainiac" replied Falco "How we gonna do that".
"First, we fallow it" and Lucario jumped into the hole without hesitation.
"Here we go" and Fox jumped in after him
"I think your all nuts". Falco, disgruntle, fallowed them.
They moved though the hole at lighting speeds and finally came out at the other end.
"Where did he go" asked Fox.
"There". Lucario pointed to the sky and in the blink of an eye Rayquaza came crashing down at lighting speed. The three jumped out of the way just in time.
"So what was that plan" Falco asked.
"We fight him with our own strength"and Lucario was off
"What good is strength when you've got fire powerful". Falco then dodged a energy ball barage. Just before another came Fox rushed out and threw out his reflector, sending the attach right into Rayquaza's face. Lucario soon jumped onto his long body and attacked his lower section. Rayquaza turned to him and fitred an energy ball. Lucario jumped out of the way and has the shot smash into Rayquaza himself. Fox jumped along his body and delivered a kick to his face.
"Forget using my feet". Falco reached towards his belt and pulled out his blaster "Not when I have a blaster ready". He then ran and unleashed a hail of laser fire.
"Not much good huh guys" said their courageous leader.
Rayquaza looked right as rain. "Here it comes" said Lucario. Rayquaza charged up for a feirce attack. "What now" said Fox.
Falco heard a sound in the distance. "Well, well, here come the calvary now. Krystal and Slippy's ships come like a flash of light and unleased a hail of laser fire at Rayquaza's mouth.
"Krystal, Slippy!" yelled Fox is excitement.
"Were here to help you" said Slippy
"Can't leave you hanging can we?" returned Krystal. They unleased more laser fire at them. Falco blasted them with his, but then looked at Fox. "Wadda think your doin' Fox?"
"Just calling in a favor. Let's do this Falco!"
"That's what I'm talking about!" Fox and Falco jumped up in the air ontop the front of Krystal and Slippy's arwings.
"Ready whenever you guys are" said Slippy.
And the two did a barrel roll knocking their friends into the air, for one awesome, heavy hitting air kick. BAM right into Rayquaza's face. Krystal and Slippy then jumped out of their arwings for an attack. Krystal pulled out her staff and smashed it into Rayquaza's head. Slippy soon fallowed with a megaton wrentch attack.
Then, out of now where screamed another ship. It was Wolf, coming out with even more firepower. Lucario was quick to jump atop Wolf's ship , launch himself with it and with a fist full of aura screamed "WATCH THE POWER OF AURA" right into Rayquaza skull. Wolf jumps out and fires his blaster at the pokemon, finishing with a slash from his blaster's blade. All for a final pose.
"Well, if it isn't Star Fox"
"THIS is who you called" yelled Falco.
Soon, more help from the sky arrived. "No, I got them" A Barrel jet came and launched Diddy Kong, Barrel Rockets and burnin' and Peatuns coming from all sides. Then, Donkey Kong pops out of the cockput and unleashed a moster punch.
Once the team hit the ground they came to a startiling reality. Rayquazy only had a minor headach. "Geez lawez, is he still getting up". "It must not have ben enough" said Lucario.
When all hope seemed lost, Jigglypuff walled right though the group and up to Rayquaza.She then handed it a trophy of Mudkip, it's favorite pokemon. Rayquaza let out a happy roar and flew off.
"What's up Fox" said Krystal
"I came all the way out here just for that. I fought a crazy dragon thing and called a bunch of monkeys, and all it wanted was a trophy" said Fox.
"I guess so" said Slippy.
"Forget this". Fox got in his Arwing and left them behind. "Who writes this crap anyway"
There you go. 2 things though guys 1)I'd like it if we not write a whole bunch of SSB fanfic. Let's keep it in one world 2)Pokemon are not plot devices.
Last Edit: Apr 22, 2008 22:32:18 GMT -5 by Smashchu
Was going to make a "change" American Kirby, but I'm not that skilled at Fireworks.
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